I need you to read line to line to see if it flows and makes sense.
Make sure all the sentence structures are correct.
ADD DETAILS where necesarry its okay to make it up if you have to
make sure commas are in the write place.
ADD thrill to the essay
doesn’t get boring
FIX and mistakes you see.
make sure to read out loud so it makes sense.
REPLACE AWKWARD PHRASING